This is quietly beautiful. I love how you let the grass mirror human vulnerability without forcing the comparison—the weariness, the waiting, the need for warmth all feel so natural. That line “No, winter is no time for the thin” really lingers; it’s tender and honest, not bleak. And ending with “sturdy sinews of memory” gives the poem such a grounded, resilient warmth. It feels like a gentle hand held through the cold.
Andy, this is a beautiful edit!! Well done 👏 🐝! Thank you for your kind words also, it’s such a pleasure having you in the group. Happy holidays and Merry Christmas to you and family!
Thanks, Alex! I didn’t quite get it cut down by a third, but the encouragement did help me cut it down some. Really appreciated the perspective you shared! Enjoy this Christmas with your little one!
I love every line of this poem💜
Thanks, Kristi! I enjoyed writing every line, this was one of those that just flowed and it was fun to watch it come to the page.
This is quietly beautiful. I love how you let the grass mirror human vulnerability without forcing the comparison—the weariness, the waiting, the need for warmth all feel so natural. That line “No, winter is no time for the thin” really lingers; it’s tender and honest, not bleak. And ending with “sturdy sinews of memory” gives the poem such a grounded, resilient warmth. It feels like a gentle hand held through the cold.
Thank you for this careful reading, Dipti. I’m Grateful to share this space with you.
It’s a wonderful poem Andy💛💛💛
Nice. Best poem to make its way to my inbox this month!
Aw thanks, that is high praise if your inbox is like mine! Appreciate the encouragement.
Beautiful! I love the metaphor. Inspiring!
Thank you, Nancy!
Andy, this is a beautiful edit!! Well done 👏 🐝! Thank you for your kind words also, it’s such a pleasure having you in the group. Happy holidays and Merry Christmas to you and family!
Thanks, Alex! I didn’t quite get it cut down by a third, but the encouragement did help me cut it down some. Really appreciated the perspective you shared! Enjoy this Christmas with your little one!
I think you did a great job of it!! Thank you ☺️