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Nancy Sobanik's avatar

I love this, Andy. The opening lines set up the poem very well- we've all felt the heaviness as winter drags on, and then spring opens us. Stanza 3's "devil's stiff fist" is so evocative. Perhaps a bit of tightening here-

"Will it be any protection against

the cruelties waiting at the edge

of winter’s sharpened knife?",

ie condensed to

"Will it be any protection against

the edge of winter’s sharpened knife?"

The reader knows what you mean by the image of the sharpened knife.

Finally, prayer is a discipline, and I am lax, but walking in nature helps me too, because my cluttered mind finds the space to return to reflection and God.

Alex Dawson's avatar

I love what you added Andy! The parishioners metaphor is awesome!

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